Тред переводчиков, слоупочный, но вечно живой №2

Анон, отбирался на вакансию копирайтера английских текстов, выслал выполненное тестовое задание, сказали не подхожу.
Кому не влом, прочитайте, неужели у меня так много ошибок в плане грамматики?

>Both “Two Kinds” by Amy Tan and “Everyday Use” by Alice Walker deal with the relationships of a mother and her daughter. Both families are alienated from the society of their country of origin and have to deal with living within a culture different from the one they ethnically belong to. Thus both authors develop their stories by projecting difficult relationships between mothers and daughters on the alien societies they have to live in.
Thus American society serves as a setting for both stories. However, it’s not society that splits these families up. It is the issue of heritage that determines the breakdowns in the relationships. While Dee in “Everyday Use” prefers to disregard her American heritage and embrace African culture she feels she’s more closely tied to, June in “Two Kinds” rather sticks to breaking apart with the methods of education imposed on her by her mother ("Of course you can be prodigy, too…You can be best anything ," claims June’s mother, implying her daughter has no other options). Eventually, both girls end up distanced from their culture heritage. With mother-daughter relationships being the focal point of both stories, the authors emphasize the fact that these relationships are determined by the difference in cultural background.
Instead of being oppressive towards daughters, mothers should have probably better chosen not to interfere with their daughters’ decisions and left it up to them to learn by their own mistakes. It might as well be that such mistakes would have turned out to only be beneficial for the girls and they would have been able to take advantage of their negative experience. By embracing the path of doing everything on their own they would have also taken all the responsibility that came with it and wouldn’t have had to blame it all on their mothers.
To sum it up, as societies are getting globalized and immigration is regarded as a common thing, stories of this kind are unarguably relevant today. Many families struggle with living far from their home country and, more importantly, from their home culture. Children growing up in such families will definitely have to undergo a change in their worldview as they are getting more mature. Through conflicts with their parents they’ll get a broader understanding of life and their own opportunities.